What do you think of my lyrics?

If you need me,


I am right here.


If you feel despaired,


Let me catch your tears.





I want to help,


With all of my heart.


But you push me away.


How am I supposed to start?





You are so beautiful,


If only you could see.


How perfect you are,


To me.





I am your friend,


And always will be.


I am here to help,


But what will happen if you won’t trust me?





If you need me,


I am right here.


I will hold you in my arms,


And chase away your fear.





You don’t see yourself clearly,


You only see what’s wrong.


I’ll be right here for you,


Even as you pull away from me, I sing this song.





You don’t realize,


That’s what is important is within.


I will protect you,


Until you are ready to stand in your own skin.





I will stay up all night with you,


All you need to do is ask.


I am here for you,


And I will help you battle your past.





If you need me,


I am here, and always will be.


I love you as you are,


When you are blind to your beauty, I will help you see.

What do you think of my lyrics?
It sucks, too long.
Reply:ok
Reply:Good lyrics!
Reply:It depends on the music. Cant be any worse then oh blah dee, oh blah dah life goes on.
Reply:Its quite long, but I do like it.
Reply:Just not sure about the first verse. Very nice though! I could never do something like that, I just don't have that talent. Glad I got to see yours though. Thanks!
Reply:its awesome!


i wouldnt be surprised if it went international!
Reply:I like them-





but, it seems to me as though you have to make up a line just to make it rhyme. My suggestion:





go to http://www.rhymezone.com and type in the word you need to rhyme it with, and I'm sure you will find that you can make stronger lyrics from that. I hope I helped, and I loved your lyrics! :)
Reply:Absolutely beautiful. :) Your poem really moved me. You are very talented. And i love your lyrics. Keep up the great work. :)
Reply:Cool!
Reply:well its obvious your the next up and coming song writer! Its just the meal part I don't care for, why don't you put, " Your emotions you don't need too seal" or something else.





from 1-10, i give a 9.0
Reply:long, but pretty good
Reply:A lot of people said it was really long, and yeah, it was pretty long, but it was really good. Don't stop writing!

primrose