What do you think about these lyrics I wrote?(black/death metal, Title:Kill Me Now)NOT FINISHED?

The walls of flame closing in/


Buried under miles of ****/


Gasping for air and breathing in toxin/


I drink my blood and eat my flesh to stay alive/


Scream until my throat rips open and I choke on blood/


Melodies of death how sweet they sound now/


Beg the Grim Reaper to take soul/


Agony in every inch of my being/


Kill me now please kill me now/


Beaten until I can’t feel the pain/


Scars from the whip’s lash still glow red/


Rip my mind into pieces and feed it to the wolves/


Display me in a cage so I can be taunted/


Animalistic thoughts are the only thing I have now/


Maggots greedily devour my entire soul/


Needles and blades break the skin daily/


Drowning in sorrowful memories/


Kill me now please kill me now/

What do you think about these lyrics I wrote?(black/death metal, Title:Kill Me Now)NOT FINISHED?
Every words that you write and make it to be lyrics is always interesting to me. I always love to read lyric, why ? Because it always come from the deep of your heart and your feeling. It is a poetry for me.


And my opinion your lyric is good for a death metal. Especially the gore metal. Cool bro.